Skild, Skulding, Skuld
770 days ago
Lets see if this works, might have to zoom in to read it.
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Another issue I have is how pompous the characters are themselves in the story so far, they don't seem casual, they make me feel like I'm reading a rehersal for a theatrical piece.
-with a fantasy setting like AQ seems a bit far fetched to me.
Another issue I have is how you present the setting, I've been with AE long enough to notice their reccuring theme of serious story telling in a goofy fashion. I can understand that it can be seperate from the AQ bits but its so far ahead, 1905 compared w
One thing, please tell me what kind of theme the story is set in. It reads like a short story, the real problem I have here is that you aren't reall targeting AQ that well here, its still something that has to be pointing towards AQ.
srry that its crooked, need to adjust it later
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