Cool man. It might help make it more readable if you increase the leading. The text size could fall down a bit too and still be readable. Also, throwing in a bolder face here and there could help to create more of a hierarchy and give some good contras
*spelling* "severely" not 'severly'. also, there's some struggle to read the beginning with the thin type and texture behind the first 3 words(the 'e's get lost, so does the 'y' on you). I like it, its catchy... try variation other than just size and lo
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justinzalewski 2016 days ago
Cool man. It might help make it more readable if you increase the leading. The text size could fall down a bit too and still be readable. Also, throwing in a bolder face here and there could help to create more of a hierarchy and give some good contras
kristuh 2017 days ago
i'm not a graphic person but there shouldn't be a comma after 'used to' lol oh and i'm gonna be back in town saturday, pics pics pics!
ceelaurent 2017 days ago
I'm a big fan of the layout and the pictures!
only advice: you've got too much text, break it down a bit!
thatlumberjack 2018 days ago
*spelling* "severely" not 'severly'. also, there's some struggle to read the beginning with the thin type and texture behind the first 3 words(the 'e's get lost, so does the 'y' on you). I like it, its catchy... try variation other than just size and lo